Lost Love

[Trevor Vincent]

I followed this very well. This was a good poem. At the end when you said, Love will always be there, my thought was that even though it was over, and you felt terrible, your love would never die. Was I right? That's my impression of it anyway. I don't think it was meant to be a contradictory line. Just my thoughts.

[Zeik Blaine]

Lost Love

I feel it;
the pain
It burns within
Feelings are depleted
Love is sacrificed
Rearranging my thoughts
Devestated by her
Alone without her
Confused by myself
Desperate to find an answer
Living without her
Takes a shot to my heart
Wanting to give up
but its still there
the love
the fear
the hysteria
lonelyness

Depression sets in
Morning after unknown
Heartache arises
Wanting her back even more
Diverting life
Shuttering cries
Leaving it behind
Shutting it away
Running away
from it all
I miss you
I want you
Love will always be there
Always

[parch]

until the end i was being led along fine..following and then i hit "Love will always be there...."
it seemed to fit exactly opposite the rest of the poem.
was this on purpose?
i can't follow that.

___---parch

[Zeik Blaine]

Yeah you see it, Trevor I tried to show that, even though the relationship was over, the love will always be there, kinda the first love scenario, type thing you know?, But that is what i tried to show and you seen, it, i also agree kinda with Parch, because, i think it does need more to end on, I'll keep working on it.